Welcome to Morgen’s Online Poetry Writing Group and the sixth poem submitted to this blog for your feedback.
This piece is by Rashmi Raj (format as submitted).
Please do comment in the section below telling us what you liked about this poem and, what if anything, the author could do to improve upon it. Thank you – it’s very much appreciated!
Darkness before dawn
The human era will have its dawn after oozes of blood
Lying on the parapet of destiny
Will vanish into the thinness of hope.
Dawn will come and so will the resultant Bambooza
Like the twist and turns of dancing girls
Reminding us of Mohenjo-Daro times when dawn meant the time of festivities.
Just as the skies get trapped with unwanted surface of endless burnouts
And universe reminding of unending, infinite black holes
Light too will dissipate to give us arrow and
Jet of goodness as humanity pervades all times.
Life is unending game of snooker and has its own darkness
God is the father of all and he throws at us different options like that of
Endless soccer ball which flies in the air only to caught by one of the eleven players.
Darkness before dawn is testing time but times do change
And the time today is the purified version of time of yesteryears.
Life’s battle haunts and as player is dead the new one rises form its ashes
Suggesting continuity and calmness of creation of universe.
Darkness before dawn is never ending phenomenon which we shall be glad
To witness front the carcass of last forgotten times.
© Rashmi Raj, Pune, India.
Thank you, Rashmi.
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Rashmi is an energetic and enthusiastic writer from India. She writes mostly on nature and human emotions and says she likes to study the different philosophies of the world and that her writings often reflect that. Rashmi’s blog is www.basicsnapshotview.blogspot.in and she would love to interact with readers of her poem.
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