Welcome to Morgen’s Online Poetry Writing Group and the first poem on this blog! This piece is a triolet by Ina Schroders-Zeeders.
Between a winter jack and a nylon furry coat
his Mac is hanging there, as if he might return,
as if he isn’t dead at all. His scent is still afloat
between a winter jack and a nylon furry coat,
his boots – with all the dirt still from the road
attached, not cleaned – are nobody’s concern.
His Mac is hanging there, as if he might return,
as if he isn’t dead at all. His scent is still afloat.
Thank you for being my first submission, Ina. I loved it… and learned what a triolet is. 🙂
She has written about 700 poems since Autumn 2010. One of them has been published in “The Journal” a British poetry magazine, others have been published in anthologies and on her weblog http://inaweblogisback.wordpress.com.
Ina lives on the island of Terschelling.
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