Category Archives: sonnet

Poem for Critique 008: Sonnet Tribute: Philippine Dilg Undersecretary Jesse Robredo (May 27, 1958 – August 18, 2012) by Xavier Paolo Josh Ledesma Mandreza

Welcome to Morgen’s Online Poetry Writing Group and the eighth poem submitted to this blog for feedback. This piece is a sonnet by Josh Mandreza.

Please do comment in the section below telling us what you liked about this poem and, what if anything, the author could do to improve upon it. Thank you – it’s very much appreciated!

Sonnet Tribute: Philippine Dilg Undersecretary Jesse Robredo (May 27, 1958 – August 18, 2012)

Ironic it was for such Hero’s Song
To be played on a Mattress we call the Sea
Just when your Daughter cried for your Belong
We need to Sing again; Then Pray haply

For the many Noble Deeds you left behind
Despite this Age of the Pork Barrel’s Tune
Such Rumours unfound; And Profile a Lie
Which most in our Office hoarded our Boon

Live well Beyond, Great Sir! I take to Vow
Your Aubourn Treatment to our Country’s Hope
Guide your Duty’s Heirs; And Family enow
And bring this Rosary blessed by your Pope.

The Song is Sung, even on Deaf Concerns
I guess it’s quite Young for People to Learn.

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Thank you, Josh.

Xavier Paolo Josh Ledesma Mandreza is a thirty-five year old male from Makati City, Philippines who specialises in Sonnet-Writing when not working as a Customer Service Adviser in a contact centre.

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If you’d like to submit your poem (50 lines max) for feedback on this blog see Submissions and / for consideration for the weekly Post-weekend Poetry slot on my main blog, take a look here.

You can sign up to receive these blog posts daily or weekly so you don’t miss anything. You can contact me and find me on the internetview my Books (including my debut novel!) and I also have a blog creation / maintenance service especially for, but not limited to, writers. If you like this blog, you can help me keep it running by donating and choose an optional free eBook.

For writers / readers willing to give feedback and / or writers wanting feedback privately, take a look at my main blog’s Feedback page.

My online writing blog / Facebook groups are:

Morgen’s Online Non-Fiction Writing Group

Morgen’s Online Novel Writing Group

Morgen’s Online Poetry Writing Group

Morgen’s Online Script Writing Group

Thank you for reading this and we look forward to your comments.

Poem 002: Punchinello by Salvatore Buttaci

Welcome to Morgen’s Online Poetry Writing Group and the second poem on this blog. This piece is a Petriacan Sonnet by multi-genre author Salvatore Buttaci. You’ll also be able to find this poem within the Sonnet section.

Please do comment in the section below telling us what you liked about this poem and, what if anything, the author could do to improve upon it. Thank you, it’s very much appreciated!

Punchinello 

On stage tonight attired in white suit
and mask of black to hide a lengthy nose,
Punchinello appears in classic pose.
With white-gloved hand the comic strums a lute
to thunderous applause. He bows: a brute
who masquerades a gentleman whose foes
are few. They see façades, just what he shows,
not the tormented fool riddled with woes,
but friendly comic Mr. Punch whose beak
elicits belly laughs, guffaws galore.
The stick with which he whacks those on the stage
is hardly humor. A second encore
brings him back. He bows and we say, “How sleek!”
as if Punch alone dons masks to hide rage.

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Thank you, Salvatore. It’s very clever how you fit the rhyme yet not make it obvious.

Sal Buttaci.School Photo.1996Salvatore Buttaci is an obsessive-compulsive writer whose work has appeared widely.  He was the 2007 recipient of the $500 Cyber-wit Poetry Award. His poems, stories, articles, and letters have appeared widely in publications that include New York Times,

U. S. A. Today, The Writer, Writer’s Digest, Cats Magazine, The National Enquirer, Christian Science Monitor, Poetic Bloomings, and A Word with You Press.  He was an English instructor at a local community college and middle-school teacher in New Jersey before he retired in 2007 to commit himself to full-time writing.

Flashing My Shorts and 200 Shorts, published by All Things That Matter Press, are available in book and Kindle editions at http://www.kindlegraph.com/authors/sambpoet

200shortscover3His two chapbooks: Boy on a Swing… http://www.thechapbookstore.com/buttaciexcerpts.html

And What I Learned from the Spaniard… http://www.amazon.com/What-Learned-Spaniard-Other-Poems/dp/B004W5859C

His new book, If Roosters Don’t Crow, It Is Still Morning: Haiku and Other Poems (Cyber-Wit Publications) is available at http://www.amazon.com/roosters-dont-crow-still-morning/dp/8182532698

A great seller since 1998, his book A Family of Sicilians is available at http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/ButtaciPublishing2008

He lives with his wife Sharon in West Virginia.

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If you’d like to submit your poem (50 lines max) for this site, see Submissions and / or for consideration for the weekly Post-weekend Poetry slot on my main blog, take a look here.

You can sign up to receive these blog posts daily or weekly so you don’t miss anything. You can contact me and find me on the internetview my Books (including my debut novel!) and I also have a blog creation / maintenance service especially for, but not limited to, writers. If you like this blog, you can help me keep it running by donating and choose an optional free eBook.

For writers / readers willing to give feedback and / or writers wanting feedback privately, take a look at my main blog’s Feedback page.

As I post an interview a day (amongst other things) I can’t unfortunately review books but I have a list of those who do, and a feature called ‘Short Story Saturdays’ where I review stories of up to 2,500 words (and post stories of up to 3,000 words). Alternatively if you have a short story or self-contained novel extract / short chapter (ideally up to 1000 words) that you’d like critiqued and don’t mind me posting it online on the Red Pen Critique posts, or posted for others to critique (up to 5,000 words) on the new Morgen’s Short Story Writing Group) then do email me. I am now also looking for flash fiction (<1000 words) for Flash Fiction Fridays and poetry for Post-weekend Poetry.