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Poem for Critique 004: A Storm Pantoum by Salvatore Buttaci

Welcome to Morgen’s Poetry Writing Group and the fourth poem on this blog. This piece is a pantoum by multi-genre author Salvatore Buttaci. Please do comment in the section below telling us what you liked about this poem and, what if anything, the author could do to improve upon it. Thank you, it’s very much appreciated.

A Storm Pantoum

One streak of lightning said to thunder,
“See how men tremble in our wake.
Look how our powers cause such wonder!
They hear and see us and they shake.

“See how men tremble in our wake.
For fear of fire and torrential flood,
they hear and see us and they shake.
Nature’s joint fury curdles blood.

“For fear of fire and torrential flood,
look how our powers cause such wonder!
Nature’s joint fury curdles blood,”
one streak of lightning said to thunder.

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Thank you, Salvatore. I’ve only ever written one pantoum (a non-rhyming called ‘Writing a Pantoum’ – maybe I should put that up here!) and find the repetition so effective.

Sal reads from 200 Shorts1Salvatore Buttaci is an obsessive-compulsive writer whose work has appeared widely.  He was the 2007 recipient of the $500 Cyber-wit Poetry Award. His poems, stories, articles, and letters have appeared widely in publications that include New York Times,

U. S. A. Today, The Writer, Writer’s Digest, Cats Magazine, The National Enquirer, Christian Science Monitor, Poetic Bloomings, and A Word with You Press.  He was an English instructor at a local community college and middle-school teacher in New Jersey before he retired in 2007 to commit himself to full-time writing.

Flashing My Shorts and 200 Shorts, published by All Things That Matter Press, are available in book and Kindle editions at http://www.kindlegraph.com/authors/sambpoet

His two chapbooks: Boy on a Swing… http://www.thechapbookstore.com/buttaciexcerpts.html

And What I Learned from the Spaniard… http://www.amazon.com/What-Learned-Spaniard-Other-Poems/dp/B004W5859C

His new book, If Roosters Don’t Crow, It Is Still Morning: Haiku and Other Poems (Cyber-Wit Publications) is available at http://www.amazon.com/roosters-dont-crow-still-morning/dp/8182532698

A great seller since 1998, his book A Family of Sicilians is available at http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/ButtaciPublishing2008

He lives with his wife Sharon in West Virginia, USA.

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