Category Archives: free verse

Poetry Writing Exercises 538: Tuesday 3rd February

Here are your four poetry exercises for today. Time yourself for 15 minutes per exercise, having a break in between each one or move on to the next.  When you’ve finished, do pop over to this blog’s Facebook Group and let everyone know how you got on.

538 squirrel 937833Below are the four – you can do them in any order.

  1. Keywords: professional, gear, carpet, sweets, mug
  2. Random: a Fibonacci poem about a caterpillar
  3. Picture: what does this inspire?
  4. Tuesday Title: Only Time Will Tell

Have fun, and if you would like to, do paste your writing in the comment boxes below so we can see how you got on! Remember though that it counts as being published so don’t post anything that you would want to submit elsewhere (where they require unpublished material).

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Poetry Writing Exercises 448: Thursday 25th September

Here are your four poetry exercises for today. Time yourself for 15 minutes per exercise, having a break in between each one or move on to the next.  When you’ve finished, do pop over to this blog’s Facebook Group and let everyone know how you got on.

448 stained-glass-praying-hands 912857Below are the four – you can do them in any order.

  1. Keywords: David, close, quiet, quite, twenty-one
  2. Random: doesn’t encourage smoking
  3. Picture: what does this inspire?
  4. Thursday Title: It’s Over

Have fun, and if you would like to, do paste your writing in the comment boxes below so we can see how you got on! Remember though that it counts as being published so don’t post anything that you would want to submit elsewhere (where they require unpublished material).

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Poetry Writing Exercises 414: Thursday 7th August

Here are your four poetry exercises for today. Time yourself for 15 minutes per exercise, having a break in between each one or move on to the next.

414 fishing 863892You can do them in any order.

  1. Keywords: pill, vitamin, vital, overdue, nonsense
  2. Random: a familiar name badge
  3. Picture: what does this inspire?
  4. Thursday Title: The Best I Can

Have fun, and if you would like to, do paste your writing in the comment boxes below so we can see how you got on! Remember though that it counts as being published so don’t post anything that you would want to submit elsewhere (where they require unpublished material).

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Poetry Writing Exercises 295: Friday 21st February

Here are your four poetry exercises for today. Time yourself for 15 minutes for each one, then either have a break or move on to the next one.

295 man 622695You can do them in any order.

  1. Keywords: thanks, British, earwig, youngster, 70th
  2. Random: too happy for a Monday morning
  3. Picture: what does this inspire?
  4. One-word prompt: leave

Have fun, and if you would like to, do paste your writing in the comment boxes below so we can see how you got on! Remember though that it counts as being published so don’t post anything that you would want to submit elsewhere (where they require unpublished material).

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Poem for Critique 017: How a can spins when shot by Bill Schwalm

Welcome to Morgen’s Online Poetry Writing Group and the seventeenth poem submitted to this blog for feedback. This piece is by Bill Schwalm.

Please do comment in the section below telling us what you liked about this poem and, what if anything, the author could do to improve upon it. Thank you – it’s very much appreciated!

How a can spins when shot

Before the crack the rifle splits from after

wounded can dance spinning pirouette—

A single yelp and airborne melted metal

rips and spins about an axis of gyration,

hops jumps bonks and bounces twice

and stops.

 

A breeze disperses little dust

and grass moves quietly beyond.

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Thank you, again, Bill.

WAS picture 1Bill Schwalm is unpublished as a poet.

He is currently Professor of Physics at The University of North Dakota, and has been reading and written poems since childhood.

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If you’d like to submit your poem (50 lines max) for feedback on this blog see Submissions and / for consideration for the weekly Post-weekend Poetry slot on my main blog, take a look here.

You can sign up to receive these blog posts daily or weekly so you don’t miss anything. You can contact me and find me on the internetview my Books (including my debut novel!) and I also have a blog creation / maintenance service especially for, but not limited to, writers. If you like this blog, you can help me keep it running by donating and choose an optional free eBook.

For writers / readers willing to give feedback and / or writers wanting feedback privately, take a look at my main blog’s Feedback page.

My online writing blog / Facebook groups are:

Morgen’s Online Non-Fiction Writing Group

Morgen’s Online Novel Writing Group

Morgen’s Online Short Story Writing Group

Morgen’s Online Script Writing Group

Thank you for reading this and we look forward to your comments.

Poem for Critique 016: Flying by night by Bill Schwalm

WAS picture 1Welcome to Morgen’s Online Poetry Writing Group and the sixteenth poem submitted to this blog for feedback. This piece is by Bill Schwalm.

Please do comment in the section below telling us what you liked about this poem and, what if anything, the author could do to improve upon it, specifically:

1.  General comments

2.  Lack of focus of antecedent in the early part

3.  Sentence length and awkwardness

4.  The fact that the couplet in the last stanza does not comprise a sentence

Thank you – it’s very much appreciated!

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Flying by night

Settled in the reeds with early snow,

lie they hidden in a thicket under elms,

or are they only tangled in the branches

where a tree has fallen by the river?

Maybe they have been among the geese

that argue in the sky at night,

as birds of passage casting shadows where

the cotton floated lately over summer fields,

now recollecting one another’s faces

only as the geese remember stars—

 

Summoned to the air by changing light

to follow avian voices in the night.

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Thank you, Bill.

WAS picture 2Bill Schwalm is unpublished as a poet.  He has been reading and writing poems since he was a boy.

He holds currently the position Professor of Physics at The University of North Dakota.

Bill would love to hear your comments via the comments section below and / or  http://www.facebook.com/william.schwalm.3.

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If you’d like to submit your poem (50 lines max) for feedback on this blog see Submissions and / for consideration for the weekly Post-weekend Poetry slot on my main blog, take a look here.

You can sign up to receive these blog posts daily or weekly so you don’t miss anything. You can contact me and find me on the internetview my Books (including my debut novel!) and I also have a blog creation / maintenance service especially for, but not limited to, writers. If you like this blog, you can help me keep it running by donating and choose an optional free eBook.

For writers / readers willing to give feedback and / or writers wanting feedback privately, take a look at my main blog’s Feedback page.

My online writing blog / Facebook groups are:

Morgen’s Online Non-Fiction Writing Group

Morgen’s Online Novel Writing Group

Morgen’s Online Short Story Writing Group

Morgen’s Online Script Writing Group

Thank you for reading this and we look forward to your comments.

Poem for Critique 010: Helpless by Anna Habryn

Welcome to Morgen’s Online Poetry Writing Group and the tenth poem submitted to this blog for feedback. This piece is by Anna Habryn, author of yesterday’s poem, Migratory Birds.

Please do comment in the section below telling us what you liked about this poem and, what if anything, the author could do to improve upon it. Thank you – it’s very much appreciated!

Anna has said, “any feedback will be appreciated

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Helpless

baby boy 87643You used to fall asleep
Happy and safe
Once
When my palm could cover your face
You’ve grown up
With both hands I cannot embrace
I could only cover your eyes
And I will not do this
My son

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© Anna Habryn 2012

Thank you, Anna.

Anna Habryn was born in Poland, graduated at Lodz University (PhD in Media), and then for a few years she worked as a university lecturer. Since 1982 she’s been living in Perth, WA.

Her novel “Love, the Scots’ Way” appeared in instalments in the Polish Gazette in Toronto, in 2003.

Her interest in the life story of P.E.Strzelecki has resulted in writing a film script, a drama and a radio play, and co-producing a book “Ballad of an Explorer or Life and Deeds of Sir Paul Edmund de Strzelecki” (2009). The play on Strzelecki, “Portrait with Women”, was staged by the Theatre Scena 98 in 2010 and showed in Perth, Melbourne, Sydney and Canberra.

Dance of LooksShe has published four collections of poems in Polish (“Kartki urodzinowe”, “Strzępy pióropusza”, “Bajeczki o miłości’ and “Machamy rękami na brzegu”) and one collection in English “The Dance of Looks”, highly commended in the Paperback in Your Hand contest, Tasmania 2009.

A member of the Gosnells Writers Circle, her poetry is published in the magazine Showcase (WA) and in the GWC anthologies.

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If you’d like to submit your poem (no line limit) for feedback on this blog see Submissions and / for consideration for the weekly Post-weekend Poetry slot on my main blog, take a look here.

You can sign up to receive these blog posts daily or weekly so you don’t miss anything. You can contact me and find me on the internetview my Books (including my debut novel!) and I also have a blog creation / maintenance service especially for, but not limited to, writers. If you like this blog, you can help me keep it running by donating and choose an optional free eBook.

For writers / readers willing to give feedback and / or writers wanting feedback privately, take a look at my main blog’s Feedback page.

My online writing blog / Facebook groups are:

Morgen’s Online Non-Fiction Writing Group

Morgen’s Online Novel Writing Group

Morgen’s Online Poetry Writing Group

Morgen’s Online Script Writing Group

Thank you for reading this and we look forward to your comments.

Poem for Critique 009: Migratory Birds by Anna Habryn

Welcome to Morgen’s Online Poetry Writing Group and the ninth poem submitted to this blog for feedback. This piece is by Anna Habryn.

Please do comment in the section below telling us what you liked about this poem and, what if anything, the author could do to improve upon it. Thank you – it’s very much appreciated!

Anna has said, “any feedback will be appreciated”

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Migratory birds

SONY DSCBeating my wings ashore of the foreign waters
I know that soon I will fly again
a goose will return to where it was born
the birds of passage – they can never stay

Anxiety driven when the time comes
they call
they gather to take off with gaggle
they assure each other to fly into the unknown
in advance of the cold wind
they teach their children that one cannot do otherwise

I know you try hard to understand
this metaphor is
a goose that landed on your diner table
the wild ones cry in the sky above

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© Anna Habryn 2012

Thank you, Anna.

Anna Habryn was born in Poland, graduated at Lodz University (PhD in Media), and then for a few years she worked as a university lecturer. Since 1982 she’s been living in Perth, WA.

Her novel “Love, the Scots’ Way” appeared in instalments in the Polish Gazette in Toronto, in 2003.

Her interest in the life story of P.E.Strzelecki has resulted in writing a film script, a drama and a radio play, and co-producing a book “Ballad of an Explorer or Life and Deeds of Sir Paul Edmund de Strzelecki” (2009). The play on Strzelecki, “Portrait with Women”, was staged by the Theatre Scena 98 in 2010 and showed in Perth, Melbourne, Sydney and Canberra.

Dance of LooksShe has published four collections of poems in Polish (“Kartki urodzinowe”, “Strzępy pióropusza”, “Bajeczki o miłości’ and “Machamy rękami na brzegu”) and one collection in English “The Dance of Looks”, highly commended in the Paperback in Your Hand contest, Tasmania 2009.

A member of the Gosnells Writers Circle, her poetry is published in the magazine Showcase (WA) and in the GWC anthologies.

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If you’d like to submit your poem (no line limit) for feedback on this blog see Submissions and / for consideration for the weekly Post-weekend Poetry slot on my main blog, take a look here.

You can sign up to receive these blog posts daily or weekly so you don’t miss anything. You can contact me and find me on the internetview my Books (including my debut novel!) and I also have a blog creation / maintenance service especially for, but not limited to, writers. If you like this blog, you can help me keep it running by donating and choose an optional free eBook.

For writers / readers willing to give feedback and / or writers wanting feedback privately, take a look at my main blog’s Feedback page.

My online writing blog / Facebook groups are:

Morgen’s Online Non-Fiction Writing Group

Morgen’s Online Novel Writing Group

Morgen’s Online Poetry Writing Group

Morgen’s Online Script Writing Group

Thank you for reading this and we look forward to your comments.

Poem for Critique 006: ‘Darkness before dawn’ by Rashmi Raj

Welcome to Morgen’s Online Poetry Writing Group and the sixth poem submitted to this blog for your feedback.

This piece is by Rashmi Raj (format as submitted).

Please do comment in the section below telling us what you liked about this poem and, what if anything, the author could do to improve upon it. Thank you – it’s very much appreciated!

Darkness before dawn

dark sky cover 95908Just like the sun rises from the blanket of clouds running across the skies

The human era will have its dawn after oozes of blood

Lying on the parapet of destiny

Will vanish into the thinness of hope.

Dawn will come and so will the resultant Bambooza

Like the twist and turns of dancing girls

Reminding us of Mohenjo-Daro times when dawn meant the time of festivities.

Just as the skies get trapped with unwanted surface of endless burnouts

And universe reminding of unending, infinite black holes

Light too will dissipate to give us arrow and

Jet of goodness as humanity pervades all times.

Life is unending game of snooker and has its own darkness

God is the father of all and he throws at us different options like that of

Endless soccer ball which flies in the air only to caught  by one of the eleven players.

Darkness before dawn is testing time but times do change

And the time today is the purified version of time of yesteryears.

Life’s battle haunts and   as player is dead the new one rises form its ashes

Suggesting continuity and calmness of creation of universe.

Darkness before dawn is never ending phenomenon which we shall be glad

To witness front the carcass of last forgotten times.

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© Rashmi Raj, Pune, India.

Thank you, Rashmi. 

Please do comment below (then you can read my feedback below and see if we agree):

Rashmi is an energetic and enthusiastic writer from India. She writes mostly on nature and human emotions and says she likes to study the different philosophies of the world and that her writings often reflect that. Rashmi’s blog is www.basicsnapshotview.blogspot.in and she would love to interact with readers of her poem.

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If you’d like to submit your poem (50 lines max) for feedback on this blog see Submissions and / for consideration for the weekly Post-weekend Poetry slot on my main blog, take a look here.

You can sign up to receive these blog posts daily or weekly so you don’t miss anything. You can contact me and find me on the internetview my Books (including my debut novel!) and I also have a blog creation / maintenance service especially for, but not limited to, writers. If you like this blog, you can help me keep it running by donating and choose an optional free eBook.

For writers / readers willing to give feedback and / or writers wanting feedback privately, take a look at my main blog’s Feedback page.

My online writing blog / Facebook groups are:

Morgen’s Online Non-Fiction Writing Group

Morgen’s Online Novel Writing Group

Morgen’s Online Poetry Writing Group

Morgen’s Online Script Writing Group

Thank you for reading this and we look forward to your comments.

Poem for Critique 005: Shake It Off by JJ Alleson

Welcome to Morgen’s Online Poetry Writing Group and the fifth poem on this blog. This piece is by JJ Alleson.

Please do comment in the section below telling us what you liked about this poem and, what if anything, the author could do to improve upon it. Thank you – it’s very much appreciated!

Shake It Off

His first kiss
Leaves her breathlesss;
Young shoots of love
Will test this
Devotion;
Her body bless his.
Hearts shake a little.

Time skips away
Promises.
His eye
Instead amasses
Fresh fruit;
Desire that passes.
Loins shake a little.

Ring-fingered vows
Now smoke-mist.
Fists give
Black eye caresses.
Aim straight and true,
Will not miss.
Brains shake a little.

Child-swollen now
She faces
Violence daily:
The basis.
Her poison
Leaves no traces:
Hands shake a little.

Eyes open
In his stillness
The cold floor
Last embraces
The final kiss
She places
Tears shake a little.
© 2013 JJ Alleson All Rights Reserved

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Thank you, JJ.

JJ Alleson lives in deep in the heart of cosmopolitan London but likes to write to infinity and beyond!

She is a multi genre writer and as a teenager had a number of poems published in local magazines and newspapers. Having grown shy of such glorious fame, she became a reader and forgot about her other life until 2010 when, with an entry into a romance competition, she ‘took up’ writing again.

Her first romance manuscript in 2012 was requested in by Harlequin Mills and Boon, but she ran away from traditional publishing after researching the contract and marketing requirements. Now she writes first for fun, and secondly for money, in the genres of paranormal, sci-fi, fantasy, a little erotica, contemporary romance and murder / thrillers.

Poets On the Ground coverHer poetry can be somewhat irreverent and has been known to upset more than just a few people – as can be seen in her first published collection: “Poems to Upset More than Just a Few People.”

JJ’s website is http://www.jjalleson.com, and her books can be found at:

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If you’d like to submit your poem (50 lines max) for feedback on this blog see Submissions and / for consideration for the weekly Post-weekend Poetry slot on my main blog, take a look here.

You can sign up to receive these blog posts daily or weekly so you don’t miss anything. You can contact me and find me on the internetview my Books (including my debut novel which is serialised on Novel Nights In!) and I also have a blog creation / maintenance service especially for, but not limited to, writers. If you like this blog, you can help me keep it running by donating and choose an optional free eBook.

For writers / readers willing to give feedback and / or writers wanting feedback privately, take a look at my main blog’s Feedback page. The online writing blogs / Facebook groups are:

Morgen’s Online Non-Fiction Writing Group

Morgen’s Online Novel Writing Group

Morgen’s Online Poetry Writing Group

Morgen’s Online Script Writing Group

Morgen’s Online Short Story Writing Group

We look forward to your comments.