Welcome to Morgen’s Online Poetry Writing Group and the seventeenth poem submitted to this blog for feedback. This piece is by Bill Schwalm.
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How a can spins when shot
Before the crack the rifle splits from after
wounded can dance spinning pirouette—
A single yelp and airborne melted metal
rips and spins about an axis of gyration,
hops jumps bonks and bounces twice
A breeze disperses little dust
and grass moves quietly beyond.
Thank you, again, Bill.
He is currently Professor of Physics at The University of North Dakota, and has been reading and written poems since childhood.
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