Poem for Critique 007: Walk Into Hell by Leanna Harrow

Welcome to Morgen’s Online Poetry Writing Group and the seventh poem submitted to this blog for feedback. This piece is by Leanna Harrow.

Please do comment in the section below telling us what you liked about this poem and, what if anything, the author could do to improve upon it. Thank you – it’s very much appreciated!

Walk Into Hell

I let you into my so called life
You paid me back with the jagged blade of your unrelenting knife

I foolishly let you touch my heart
I knew better from the start

You taught me well
As you walked me straight into hell

From this nightmare I will wake
With that all too familiar wrenching ache

Never again will I give my heart away
You saw to that on this very day

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Thank you, Leanna.

You can read my feedback HERE.

LeanneLeanna Harrow grew up on the Central Coast of California where the beaches were pristine and the sunsets spectacular. She attended the school of hard knocks as traditional schools had too many rules and regulations. She raised four children who turned out happy, healthy, productive members of society. Each of her children grew up to possess her independent spirit and headstrong ways but are all awesome people.

For all of her love, time, and devotion, Leanna’s children have repaid her with the ultimate gift of grandchildren. They are her favorite past time and at present, she has four of them. Leanna’s sure that the future holds more of them.

KillingtheDesire_Draft book cover from DamnationHer hobbies include cooking huge meals for her extended family, a good game of billiards every now and then, reading a good book—as well as writing one, writing poems that pop into her head at the most inopportune times, listening to music as many hours a day as possible and people watching, especially men!

Leanna lives in North Carolina and her website is www.leannaharrow.com.

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One response to “Poem for Critique 007: Walk Into Hell by Leanna Harrow

  1. I like the imagery of this bitter and unrelenting poem; it has no natural rhythm and I wonder if this is an effect by the author to put the reader/speaker on edge. The words are hard and cold, which does leave the reader a little uncomfortable. I personally think this could have more power of the stanzas two and three are mimicking the beat of the opening, adding a few more words could enrich the piece. On the whole though, I liked it. I like dark poems and this is certainly that.

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